On Flawed Characters and Imperfect Endings, or Lessons Learned From “The Big Sleep”.

One of my early reviewers of The Bad Shepherd critiqued that most of the main character’s mistakes were because of flaws in his personality that he might otherwise have avoided. Said another way, Bo Fochs didn’t learn his lessons. In many ways that was true and but it was also intentional. I wanted to create a imperfect hero that often times failed because of himself. Crime fiction is a genre about deeply flawed characters, people who are put into terrible situations and react, sometimes dangerously, sometimes violently but almost always in ways that skirt the law or norms of society.

Bo Fochs is a character that was struggling with his demons and sometimes those demons got the better of him. Also, much like a real person, Bo doesn’t always learn his lessons. There are times in the story when the reader can predict the consequences of the choice Fochs is going to make, likely, the character does too and yet he chooses that course of action regardless. One of the fundamental parts of his personality is that when he sets a course, he follows it through regardless of the consequences. He does this because its what he believes to be right and he holds those values above everything else, even his career, his relationships or his reputation.

I can appreciate how that might be frustrating for a reader. If you’re emotionally invested in the character, you want to see him grow and improve, to not make the same mistake at the end of the book as he did in the beginning. You want to see him win. But, in real life that’s not always the case. Bo’s failures also support one of the major themes of this series, which is how deeply flawed and often senseless the drug war was in the 1980s and remains today. Bo is, in many ways, an allegory for the broader fight against gangs, drugs and street crime. Often times, good people are forced into bad situations and must do questionable things for what they believe is the greater good. Further, when victories are won, they are usually costly, even pyrrhic ones.

When I was writing The Bad Shepherd, I was thinking a lot of Raymond Chandler’s, The Big Sleep. The book is somewhat notorious in crime fiction for having left a murder unsolved. When asked who killed the chauffeur, Chandler once said, “I don’t know, do you?” My theory has always been that Chandler never edited the book heavily himself and simply left a plot hole, but I believe that over time that ending has come to represent  one of the fundamental truths of crime fiction, which is that sometimes the case (in whole or in part) goes unsolved. It represents the mistakes that add an essential realism to the world of the story.

Bo Fochs lives in a dirty world and he is an imperfect knight. But I believe that it is those flaws that make him a more believable, more relatable character. There are two books planned following The Bad Shepherd, and in those we will explore his character in more depth. If you’ve read The Bad Shepherd you know that he will go to almost any length to do what he thinks is right, but how far is too far and does he have a limit? Join me in the next one and find out.

Director’s Cuts in Fiction

Caution: Spoilers

I’ve always loved director’s cuts. I think its fascinating to explore what forced a film maker to remove content and arrive at their final prodcuct. The reasons are endless–the film was running too long, a scene or character didn’t focus group well, there was a debate between the producer and the director. Editing a novel is very similar. As a general rule, my approach in the editing process is to remove any scene or character that doesn’t ultimately serve the story’s climax. I do this as a check to constrain the length of the story and also to make sure that I don’t have extraneous material that, while interesting, doesn’t move the story forward.

The version of The Bad Shepherd that I first released in October 2016 after deciding to publish it independently was edited with a traditional publisher in mind. The edits I made (some very painful) were done to fit the story into the constraints of the traditional publishing industry. For example, a debut crime novel is expected to be between 80,000 and 90,000 words (roughly around 300-350 pages). To do that, I had to make some very difficult choices regarding what I would remove and had to make some equally difficult decisions regarding the ultimate plot and how those edits would serve that plot. The hardest for me was making the book entirely about Bo Fochs.

In the original version, the story was equally about Fochs and his partner, Mitchell Gaffney. Their arc of their relationship and the strains the case put on it was one of central themes of the book. In that version, the reader is able to find some empathy for Mitch and understand why he burned his partner the way he did. Marlon Rolles also had much more screen time and we could see just how pervasive (and truly diabolical) his operation was. But, we also saw that he was actually helping people through his foundation, so he wasn’t quite the one-sided villain that I perceive him to be in the published version. Bo and Daphne’s relationship was much longer and had greater depth, so you truly understood his reactions and felt that pain upon learning of her death. Finally, there was a member of Lorenzo Fremont’s crew that added a crucial human element to the antagonists.

So, why did I cut those things? Well, none of those elements served the ultimate end of the book, which was to force a confrontation between Bo Fochs and Marlon Rolles. After everything else was peeled away, the climactic moment is that conflict and the choice I made was if something did not explicitly serve that purpose, I had to cut it in order to meet an arbitrary word count. Ultimately, even though I decided to independently publish, I chose not to add those things back in, because I felt that my first novel needed to be a tightly plotted, fast read. But, lately, I’ve been rethinking that decision.

Recently, I’ve watched two director’s cuts that entirely change their original films. Goodfellas and Payback. If you’ve seen the originals, go watch these. Payback, in particular, is an entirely different film than the original and both director’s cuts offer (in my opinion) a more complete cinematic experience. I want to do the same with The Bad Shepherd. In the near future, probably when I begin researching and plotting the sequel, I’m going to release a director’s cut that will include many or all of the deleted arcs I described above. We’ll get a deeper connection with both the heroes and the antagonists and have a more complete experience, the way I originally envisioned the story.

I believe the book works very well right now as a lean, driving crime story but I also want an opportunity to share the book I originally conceived, which is a much different experience than the version of The Bad Shepherd on virtual shelves today. Those cuts flesh out the world of the story and while they may not explicitly serve the climactic moment, they bring a much needed depth that I think readers would appreciate.